Blog Assignment #3 - "Authors Note"

As soon as we looked to our right there it was in plain sight, a guy about 25 feet away with a gun pointed at us. We just froze for a moment. I screamed, “Oh my god!” and we both quickly turned around and ran right back into the door that we had just exited out of. It was dark out so I couldn’t make out who the gun man was. I have heard too many horror stories of innocent people being caught in the crossfire of a gun and I didn’t want to be the next victim. After that I don’t remember anybody or anything around me, all I know is that I ran as fast as I could to the bar and I hid behind it. I heard a commotion come through the door, but all I could think is where’s Nicole? I waited about a minute then I popped my head out the top of the bar and looked around. I saw Nicole. I ran out and said what happened? Where did he go? She said,” I don’t know but I think he’s gone”.


I chose to write about this "real event" in my life, because of the suspense and dramatization. It is something that I know a reader would be interested in. They would want to keep reading to see how the story plays out and what happens in the end. Basically, to understand the peice you must know that a gun was pulled out on my friend and I at a pool hall, but no one was injured. Now that I will be able to revise this piece I want to add more description into what I saw that night. For instance, to create the setting before I say what happens next. I have not written a short story like this before, and I think as I continue to write i will get better and better at it. For right now I know what some of my mistakes were. Usually I would be writing academic essays so there is a big difference between these two writings. I think I could have gotten more in depth about my feelings (scared, nervous), described what I saw a little bit more, but since I am not used to it, it was harder for me. I wrote my peice on word processor.